Comments on: Rule #1: You need to set your characters up before you can knock ‘em down.

By: Matt

Matt — Fri, 27 Jun 2008 18:39:01 +0000

It is an Oxymoron Nathan. Except when your drinking wine. Then its…I dunno…ironic or sad or something…

By: russ

russ — Fri, 27 Jun 2008 18:38:24 +0000

There’s a wine for every occasion. Even Southpark. Although I would say that particular wine probably comes from a box.
I like the new script changes!

By: Nathan

Nathan — Fri, 27 Jun 2008 16:58:41 +0000

I just want to point out the fact that you were drinking wine while watching Southpark isn’t that like a Oxymoron.

By: Dave

Dave — Wed, 25 Jun 2008 16:21:44 +0000

I think the introduction of the characters is much better now. Good job.

By: Lucas Martell

Lucas Martell — Wed, 25 Jun 2008 16:13:15 +0000

Excellent changes Matt! I can also envision the camera angles much more clearly in the new version. If you want one more thing that would even further clarify things, You could have the bird rattling the cage or the woman make a sound that annoys the man so he has a reason to look up at the woman the first time. Might not work with your camera angles, but that was the one thing that immediately popped into my head as I was reading it. Just an idea!